AP Language Response Help

After correcting your AP Language responses on Renaissance poetry, I've produce the standard "Sentences Outlawed in Every English Class" worksheet illustrating some common (and major) areas of concern. Areas of concern include excesses of clutter, cliche phrases, poor or inappropriate word choice, misuse of rhetorical devices and strategies, unnecessary repetition, structural issues, etc. Upon close examination, these same errors appeared in several papers AND in your last AP responses (Jamaica Kincaid's "Girl" article). And therein lies the rub...

I'd like each of you to consider a question or two...or three...you may have that warrants class clarification. We are far from being finished practicing AP responses, and I want to make sure, despite our limited class time, your questions are answered. This is your forum and it's your class. That being said, what do you think you need to most extra help with on your language responses?